Thanks Alan! This editorial feedback is important, and I'll make this change before we go to Formal Vote. As an alternative, I could replace the "and" with a period, and make the second half of the (pretty long) sentence a new sentence, like so:
The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. This authentication method is initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request message during the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
Any strong opinions either way? I'm also not sure that I should be capitalizing "Authentication" in "The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method...".
Smith
> On Feb 26, 2019, at 6:01 AM, Sukert, Alan <alan.sukert at xerox.com> wrote:
>> Minor comment (grammatically sentence did not read correctly; suggested addition is in red type) that can be ignored if needed to approve - Lines 272-274: The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. X.509 certificate authentication via TLS and is initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request message during the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
>> Alan Sukert
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