Hello All,
Here are my comments (Line numbers from redlined document “wd-ippauth-20190117-rev.pdf”):
Line 14: This is a PWG Best Practice. For the definition of a "PWG Best Practice", see:
Suggestion: This is a PWG Best Practice document. For the definition of “PWG Best Practice”, see:
Lines 158-174: 3.3.1. Authentication Failure Prevents Access / 3.3.2. Authorization Failure Prevents Access
Suggestion: Same as Canon and TIC: We need to differentiate user story of Authentication vs Authorization failure.
Line 195: these cases, the Printer could still need to acquire the User's identity in order to
Suggestion: these cases, the Printer could still need to acquire the User's identity in order to
Lines 221-222: In the 'requesting-user-name' IPP Authentication Method [RFC8011], the Client MUST provides …
Suggestion: In the 'requesting-user-name' IPP Authentication Method [RFC8011], the Client MUST provide provides …
Lines 235-236: It is employed in IPP in much the same way that it is employed in conventional HTTP workflows
Suggestion: It is employed in IPP in much the same way that it is employed as in conventional HTTP workflows…
Lines 248-249: It is employed in IPP in much the same way that it is employed in conventional HTTP workflows
Suggestion: It is employed in IPP in much the same way that it is employed as in conventional HTTP workflows…
Line 268: the OAuth2 authentication scheme [RFC6749], which provides...
Question: Is this sentence a placeholder (incomplete); meant to be completed later?
Line 269: The OAuth2 Bearer Token [RFC6750] which provides...
Question: Is this sentence a placeholder (incomplete); meant to be completed later?
Lines 302-304: Provide possible technical solutions/approaches in this section. Include pros and cons …
Question: Is this paragraph a placeholder (incomplete); meant to be completed later?
Best Regards,
Cihan Colakoglu
Kyocera Document Solutions
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