Hi Smith and Alan,
I strongly prefer the two sentences solution.
We should all try to avoid long sentences with operational content in more
than one
subclause, because they interfere w/ clarity.
Cheers,
- Ira
Ira McDonald (Musician / Software Architect)
Co-Chair - TCG Trusted Mobility Solutions WG
Co-Chair - TCG Metadata Access Protocol SG
Chair - Linux Foundation Open Printing WG
Secretary - IEEE-ISTO Printer Working Group
Co-Chair - IEEE-ISTO PWG Internet Printing Protocol WG
IETF Designated Expert - IPP & Printer MIB
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On Tue, Feb 26, 2019 at 10:17 AM Kennedy, Smith (Wireless & Standards
Architect) <smith.kennedy at hp.com> wrote:
> Thanks Alan! This editorial feedback is important, and I'll make this
> change before we go to Formal Vote. As an alternative, I could replace the
> "and" with a period, and make the second half of the (pretty long) sentence
> a new sentence, like so:
>> The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate
> authentication via TLS. X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. This authentication
> method is initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request
> message during the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
>> Any strong opinions either way? I'm also not sure that I should be
> capitalizing "Authentication" in "The 'certificate' IPP Authentication
> method...".
>> Smith
>>>> On Feb 26, 2019, at 6:01 AM, Sukert, Alan <alan.sukert at xerox.com> wrote:
>> Minor comment (grammatically sentence did not read correctly; suggested
> addition is in red type) that can be ignored if needed to approve - Lines
> 272-274: The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate
> authentication via TLS. X.509 certificate authentication via TLS and is
> initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request message during
> the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
>> Alan Sukert
> Product Security Specialist
> Xerox Research and Product Development/ Product Security and Development
> Process Controls
> Xerox Certified Green Belt
>Alan.Sukert at xerox.com| tel 585.427.1413
> MS 0111-03A | 800 Phillips Road | Webster, NY 14580 USA
>> -----Original Message-----
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> Sweet
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> Subject: [PWG-Announce] PWG Last Call: IPP Authentication Methods (Ends
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>> Hi,
>> [This PWG Last Call starts today, February 1, 2019, and ends Thursday,
> February 28, 2019 at 10pm US Pacific time.]
>> This is the formal announcement of the IPP Authentication Methods best
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