Hi,
FWIW - I second Mike's comments about internal links. For the IPP
System Service, this would affect several hundred references.
Cheers,
- Ira
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On Thu, Dec 8, 2016 at 11:29 AM, Michael Sweet <msweet at apple.com> wrote:
> Smith,
>> Thanks for your feedback. Looking through the comments, I'm not sure how
> to (simply, easily) resolve #5 - Word's support for internal hyperlinks is
> poor, and trying to get it to select only the bracketed name ("[FOO]") in
> the 79 places I'd need to do this isn't something I want to do unless
> people see this as necessary. For the record, in the history of the PWG I
> think your implementor's guide is the only specification we have ever
> produced that had such internal links...
>>> On Dec 7, 2016, at 5:02 PM, Kennedy, Smith (Wireless Architect) <
>smith.kennedy at hp.com> wrote:
>> Greetings,
>> Here are a number of points of feedback on the IPP 3D Printing extensions
> draft in PWG Last Call (http://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/> ipp/wd/wd-ipp3d10-20161114.pdf) - apologies that I haven't submitted
> these earlier:
>>> 1. Page 10, line 267: "extrude ABS and/or PLA filaments" might be
> better phrased as "extrude filaments of ABS, PLA, or other substances"
> 2. Page 10, line 271: "Discovery of 3D Printers is based on..."
> perhaps should be "Discovery of IPP 3D Printers is based on..."
> 3. Page 12, section 2.5: the URL highlighting seems to be inconsistent
> - only one is in blue with an underline
> 4. Page 12, section 2.5: 3MF isn't listed here as an organization, but
> ought to be?
> 5. Page 13, line 347 / 350 / 352 / etc.: The reference doesn't seem to
> be a bookmark that can take the reader to the reference listing
> 6. Page 13, line 357: PDF isn't listed as an existing specification
> 7. Page 13, line 358: "...document should define IPP attributes..."
> changed to be "...document defines IPP attributes..."
> 8. Page 22, line 559: "DNS-SD based Discovery" might instead be
> "DNS-SD for service advertisement and discovery". Also, not quite sure why
> "Discovery" is capitalized here...
> 9. Page 22, line 573: Some weird pagination stuff going on - lines
> 574-576 should be on page 22, and Table 2 should be on possibly page 22 or
> maybe page 23. But all the whitespace on page 23 seems to be a formatting
> glitch.
> 10. Page 24, line 586: "ASSIGN OID HERE"? Is it time to assign the OID?
> 11. Page 25, line 603: Should "[RFC3510] and IPP-USB [IPP-USB]"
> be "[RFC3510] and/or IPP-USB [IPP-USB]"?
> 12. Page 34, line 729: If "materials-key" is required, then
> "printer-strings-uri" should also be required, but it isn't listed in table
> 5 / section 6.5
> 13. Page 35, line 759: If "materials-key" is required, then
> "printer-strings-uri" should also be required, but it isn't listed in table
> 5 / section 6.5
> 14. Page 44, line 979: Is there any requirement as to the document
> format of the images available at this URI?
> 15. Page 54, section 13.4: Shouldn't the 3MF Consortium be handing the
> registration of the "media/3mf" media type?
> 16. Page 54, line 1338: The type name "media/3mf" isn't consistent
> with the type name listed in table 2 ("model/3mf"). Which is correct?
>> Thanks for the hard work, Mike and all contributors!
>> Smith
>> /**
> Smith Kennedy
> Wireless Architect - Client Software - IPG-PPS
> Standards - IEEE ISTO PWG / Bluetooth SIG / Wi-Fi Alliance / NFC Forum
> / USB IF
> Chair, IEEE ISTO Printer Working Group
> HP Inc.
> */
>>>>> _________________________________________________________
> Michael Sweet, Senior Printing System Engineer
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