Don, Thanks for doing the presentation on requirements. Here are my comments.
Roles and Tasks (chart #2)
1. Under the End-User bullet, "Finding and location ..." should be "Finding
and locating ..."
1.1 Under the End-User bullet, please change "Viewing the status of a printer
..." to "Viewing the status of a printer and its jobs ...". I realize
that a list of jobs is implied by the status of a printer but it might be
helpful to the audience/readers to see this explicitly stated in the text.
2. Under the End-User bullet, please add a sub-bullet "Cancelling their own
own print job". The requirements document indicates this function is
supported for "end-users".
3. Under the End-User bullet, please add a sub-bullet "Alerting due to job
conditions (job completion or job error) and printer error conditions".
This is supported by the notification-events attribute in the IPP draft.
4. Under the End-User bullet, do we need to add a sub-bullet for "Modifying
their own print job"? We might get asked why a user cannot modify the
attributes (e.g. number of copies) of a submitted print job before it
prints since the major NOS support this capability today. If we add this
bullet, we must state that this function is not supported in IPP 1.0 on
chart #3.
5. Under the Administrator bullet, please add a sub-bullet "Configuration of
the print subsystem including creation of printer objects".
6. Under the Administrator bullet, please add a sub-bullet "Access control".
I view authorization as the act of assigning the role of "end-user",
"operator" and "administrator" to each user while access control controls
who can print on the printer (e.g. "end-users" barney and betty can print
on a printer but "end-users" fred and wilma cannot print on the printer).
Technical (chart #3)
7. Please change the title from "Technical" to "Objectives for IPP 1.0". I
believe that's the purpose of this chart as it relates to the requirements
document.
8. Please change bullet "Operator Requirements (Initially)" to "Supports the
tasks for an End-User". Since the title reflects "IPP 1.0", I don't think
there is a need to state "(Initially)".
9. Under the "Firewalls" bullet, please change "Protocols must ... firewalls
so enabled" to "Protocols must ... firewalls where enabled by the firewall
administrator". This is consistent with the wording in the requirements
document.
Thanks,
Keith