Michael -
Below are the official Xerox comments against the PWG Last Call for the PWG Log Spec:
1. This document doesn't have as many acronyms as other specs, but it does have some acronyms so a List of Acronyms should be provided in Section 2. To help, here are the acronyms I spotted in the document - FQDN, MFD, RFC, PWG, HIPAA, IP, IPP, IANA, MIB, URI, IDS, UUID
2. Section 1, pg. 9, Line 155: The reference to IEEE Std 2600 in the text here is incorrect; it should be IEEE Std 2600(tm)-2008.
3. Section 4.1, pg. 13, Line 245: This is a suggestion. I think grammatically this sentence is incorrect as written; it should be "The value"-" MAY be used; however, Imaging Devices SHOULD make reasonable attempts..."
4. The following documents listed in Sections 10.1 and 10.2 are not referenced elsewhere in the document - [IEEE2600.1], [IEEE2600.2], [IEEE2600.3], [IEEE2600.4], [RFC2277], [RFC3998], [RFC5246], [RFC5425] and [RFC5426].
5. Section 5.1.2, pg. 17, Line 347: Again this is a suggestion. I think grammatically this sentence is incorrect as written; it should be "Most log events map directly from the corresponding IPP notification events; however, logged events are sent both for success and failure."
6. Section 5.1.8, pg. 18, Line 377: I believe grammatically this should read ""Administrator", a user who is authorized to manage all aspects of a device or service,"
Alan
From: pwg-announce-bounces at pwg.org [mailto:pwg-announce-bounces at pwg.org] On Behalf Of Murdock, Joe
Sent: Monday, November 26, 2012 3:47 PM
To: pwg-announce at pwg.org
Subject: [Pwg-Announce] PWG Last call of PWG-Log
All,
[This PWG Last Call starts today Monday November 26, 2012 and ends Friday January 18, 2013 at 10pm US PST.]
This is the formal announcement of the PWG Last Call for the PWG Log specification, located at:
ftp://<ftp://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/ids/wd/wd-ids-log10-20121112.pdf>ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/ids/wd/wd-ids-log10-20121112.pdf<ftp://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/ids/wd/wd-ids-log10-20121112.pdf>
All required entries and values defined in this document have been prototyped by Apple. The IDS WG has completed extensive review of the various revisions of this document and an IDS WG last call.
The PWG Process/3.0 requires that a quorum (30%) of PWG voting members must acknowledge a PWG Last Call (with or without comments), before any document can progress to PWG Formal Vote. This PWG Last Call is NOT a Formal Vote but it DOES require your review acknowledgment.
HOW TO RESPOND
Send an email with *exactly* the following subject line format:
Subject: <Company Name> has reviewed the PWG-Log specification and has [no] comments
WHERE TO SEND YOUR RESPONSE
Please send your response to *all* of the following email addresses (replacing "dot" with '.' and "at" with '@'):
"ids "at" pwg "dot" org (IDS WG mailing list - you must be subscribed!)
jmurdock "at" sharplabs "dot" com (Joe Murdock, IDS WG Chair)
alan.sukert "at" xerox "dot" com (Alan Sukert, IDS WG Secretary)
msweet "at" apple "dot" com (Michael Sweet, PWG-Log Editor)
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Please do NOT simply reply to this note on the PWG-Announce list.
Note: The PWG Definition of the Standards Development Process Version 3.0 is located at:
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Joe Murdock
Principal Engineer and Researcher
Chair IEEE/ISTO Printer Working Group Imaging Device Security
Sharp Labs of America
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