Comments against March 21 2011 clean pdf.
Header needs to reflect the title (Copy Service Semantic Model and Service
Interface)
Line 40: title here doesn't match the front cover
Line 171: The MFD Copy Service abstract model not model (includes)
Line 172: underscore between connected and multifunction
Line 220: The reference to the MFD Model and Common Semantics spec. is
inconsistent.
Shouldn't be MFD Overall (search for the word overall)
Line 222: update name of MFD document.
Line 222: three e.g., without the commas in this paragraph.
Line 250: Add name of MFD Model and Common Semantics spec before reference.
(alternatively
could just do this at the first mention and just use the bracketed reference
afterward)
Line 282: suggest rewording last sentence to The System element provides an
all-encompassing view of all
the Subunits of the MFD. (or at least add a comma after MFD in the current
sentence)
Line 334: Fourth row of table last cell has an extra comma at the end of the
first line
Line 338: Need a comma after i.e.
Line 345: extra period before the parenthetical
Line 379: extra space before the period.
Line 380: reword last sentence to "The element values can be modified
directly or modified
indirectly through an operation.
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Line 504: See line 490 comment.
Line 522: should be optional ...not option
Line 573: NEED NOT is not a conformance term
Line 551: change font of paragraph to template font, not Times New Roman
Line 576: See line 490 comment.
Line 579: See line 490 comment.
Line 582: See line 490 comment.
Line 587: need to put the PWG number here and fix the name of the document
to: MFD Model and Common Semantics version 1.0
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Comments against March 21 2011 clean pdf.
Header needs to reflect the title (Copy Service Semantic Model and Service Interface)
Line 40: title here doesn't match the front cover
Line 171: The MFD Copy Service abstract model not model (includes)
Line 172: underscore between connected and multifunction
Line 220: The reference to the MFD Model and Common Semantics spec. is inconsistent.
Shouldn't be MFD Overall (search for the word overall)
Line 222: update name of MFD document.
Line 222: three e.g., without the commas in this paragraph.
Line 250: Add name of MFD Model and Common Semantics spec before reference. (alternatively
could just do this at the first mention and just use the bracketed reference afterward)
Line 282: suggest rewording last sentence to The System element provides an all-encompassing view of all
the Subunits of the MFD. (or at least add a comma after MFD in the current sentence)
Line 334: Fourth row of table last cell has an extra comma at the end of the first line
Line 338: Need a comma after i.e.
Line 345: extra period before the parenthetical
Line 379: extra space before th period.
Line 380: reword last sentence to "The element values can be modified directly or modified
indirectly through an operation.
Line 490: MFD Model and Common Semantics spec reference is bad
Line 479: MFD Model and Common Semantics spec reference is bad
Line 504: See line 490 comment.
Line 522: should be optional ...not option
Line 573: NEED NOT is not a conformance term
Line 551: change font of paragraph to template font, not Times New Roman
Line 576: See line 490 comment.
Line 579: See line 490 comment.
Line 582: See line 490 comment.
Line 587: need to put the PWG number here and fix the name of the document
to: MFD Model and Common Semantics version 1.0