Comments are against the clean PDF dated June 9, 2010
(adding the .pdf to the link in the last call announcement)
1. Line 12, Multifunction is spelled wrong
2. Line 15, The word elements is in caps and shouln't be, even if it's
decided to create a reserved
word Elements when talking about XML Elements, it doesn't apply here.
3. Line 15, The word service should not be in caps.
4. Line 16, The word service should not be in caps.
5. Line 18, The word device should not be in caps.
6. Line 145, The word requirements should not be in caps.
7. ALL, There is a very confusing and incosistent capitalization of the
words Document(s), Device, Elements, Service(s)
Intent, User(s) and Subunit throughout the document, these words should
only be in caps when they are used in the way they
are defined in the Terminology Section.
8. Line 165, The word broadened is mis-spelled and doesn't need to be there
in the first place
(broadened is a synonym for expanded).
9. Table 1, Character spacing of <service>Job Ticket is not consistent
Defn. of <service> DocumentTicket uses <service> Client (which is not a
valid term)
Defn. of <service>Job Resource (with a Job)
Defn. of Element (this is not a valid definition as it is completely
circular)
Defn. of Document Repository (uses the term Digital Document which is
not in the terminology section)
Defn. of Job Owner (or Owner) (personwho needs fixing)
Defn. of Users (should be JobOwner's group not Owner's group)
10. Line 173, remove the word primitive
11. Line 192, sentences don't begin with the word And.
12. Line 191, the word documents is mis-spelled.
13. Line 251, bad grammer to end the sentence with "truly are"
14. Line 257, Facsimile Service is not one of the services, should be lower
cased
15. All, When referring to the proper MFD Services, sometimes they are in
bold characters
and sometimes they are not. Make consistent.
16. Line 273, The word Digital Document is not in the terminology section.
17. Line 337, The word modeling should not be in caps.
18. Line 338, The word production (two places) should not be in caps.
19. Line 390, The word sharing is mis-spelled.
20. Line 411, The word launches is mis-spelled.
21. Line 403, An example of the cap's problem (Intent).
22. Line 411, The term Client is definied as interacting with a User and a
Service, JobTemplate is neither.
also occurs in Line 419.
23. Line 448, The word Intent is in caps.
24. Line 462, The term Intent is <service>Intent, Job is NOT a service.
also occurs in Line 463.
25. Line 471, Need a period at the end of the sentence.
26. Line 495, Spacing of the word Physical Job Ticket (if it is the
mis-used term) does not match that of
Line 507.
27. Line 510, The word Document is mis-spelled and there is a "d" missing
on the word and.
28. Line 511, Too many periods.
29. Line 533, Unnecessary period in the line
30. Line 592, The word Services is mis-spelled
32. Line 612, The word Modeling is mis-spelled.
33. Line 631, The word Intent is in caps.
34. Line 615, "by just some" should be "a sub-set of the".
35. Line 651, The word service is missing an s (and shouldn't be in caps)
36. Line 658, Future services won't update the PWG SM and XML Schema,
Future Service Specifications or
Future Service Model Specifications might. (same for Line 661, and Line
664)
(See attached file: JT_MFDREQ_Comments_060910.txt)
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