<fontfamily><param>Times New Roman</param><bigger>As preparation for
tomorrow's phone conference, I have made
a stab at writing down my comments against Keith's list.
I have tried to express the views of the WG rather than my
personal ones, but I am prepared to stand corrected if I got some
things wrong. I already had a phone conference with the editors
yesteray and they will start updating the drafts with all the things
considered to be "Edititorial" in my comments. Roger deBry will
take over the editing of the Rationale document, as I assume
that Steve Zilles will not be available to us.
My comments start with CM> and follow each issue listed.
We will work further on this list in the phone conference tomorrow.
My intension is to get the revised drafts back to Keith within the
next two weeks. As stated in another message, these fixes are part of
the IESG process and can be done quickly, unless we run into
disagreements
about them.
Carl-Uno
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At long last I've completed my review of the IPP documents.
My comments follow.
Please note that we're still waiting for the TLS document
to clear (sigh)... things that depend on TLS can't go
through until TLS is finished. Last I heard they were waiting
on resolution of some patent issues and/or an X.509 profile
that allowed use of UTF-8 in printable strings. (yeech)
CM> I have sent out a question to the TLS WG DL asking about status.
They are currently blaming PKIK for the hold-up. I am pursuing that
at present.
I apologize for this haven taken so long.
Keith
summary:
Basically I think the protocols are mostly sound, though the
documents need some editorial cleanup. There are some minor
technical tweaks here and there.
The biggest change that I think is needed, is that IPP's use
of HTTP doesn't allow a firewall to distinguish between IPP
traffic and ordinary HTTP traffic. Also, IPP's insistence on
using port 80 could conflict with ordinary use of that port, in
those cases where the IPP server was not designed to "plug in" to
the HTTP server. For these reasons, I suggest that a separate
port be allocated for IPP, and an "ipp" URL defined which defaults
to the IPP port rather than port 80. An alternative would be to
have IPP use the PRINT method rather than POST, but to me the
separate port seems cleaner and more likely to be compatible
with firewalls. One could still use IPP on port 80, by using
the port override notation: ipp://hostname:80/etc.
CM> I sent out a question to the HTTP WG DL about
the adviceabilty of introducing a new URL scheme and to
allocate a new default port number to IPP. Not to my surprise,
responses so far from the HTTP experts were that allocating
a new port wold not cause too much of a problem, but most
everybody strongly adviced against a new URL scheme.
CM> The alternative proposal to use PRINT instead of
POST seems more acceptable and causes less problems.
Note that we now have in effect a policy of not allocating
separate ports for with/without TLS. (I've asked the security
ADs in IESG to review this policy, but I think it will be upheld.)
Someone has an internet-draft which attempts to define a way
to negotiate TLS in-band over HTTP; you might want to look at that.
CM> I do not think we care about this one. Our latest solution
does not dictate one or the other. As for considering a new I-Ds
that is far from the standards track - forget it.
similarly, using the "s" suffix on the URI type to indicate TLS/
is considered by many to be a Bad Idea; if it's necessary to specify
a particular authentication and/or encryption type, it should
probably be done using a URI parameter. (and it should probably
be more flexible than just ";security=tls")
CM> Again, we do not really care, we will do what the security
groups decide - if they ever make a decision.
detailed comments follow; I apologize for mixing the purely
editorial (most of the comments) with the technical issues,
and thus making this unnecessarily tedious to read for anyone
other than the authors. but this way, I get to cross this off
my list today!
general:
1. In addition to the keywords defined in RFC 2119, the documents
use a number of upper case terms like SHALL, SHALL NOT, NEED NOT,
etc. If these terms are in upper case because they have special
meanings, those meanings need to be defined somewhere, and each
document that uses those terms needs to have a prominent notice
(i.e. near the beginning of the document) pointing to those
definitions. If the terms have their normal meanings (which
from my reading seems to be the case), they should be spelled in
lower case, unless there is some reason to emphasize a particular
use of a term.
CM> It seems doubtful that Keith has actually read RFC 2119, which
states that these terms are often capitalized and uses that in RFC2119
itself.
On the other hand, it appears that SHALL etc. are sometimes used
when one of the words in RFC 2119 would do just as well. It would
be better to keep consistent technology unless there's a good reason
not to do so.
CM> Editorial
Note that the keywords in RFC 2119 are generally used to indicate
implementation choices that would affect compliance with a standard,
or very occasionally, requirements for operation of the service
(as in "SMTP servers MUST accept mail addressed to Postmaster")
Other uses of "MUST", "SHOULD", etc. should generally use lower
case letters. For instance, the IPP design goals "MUST" be
satisfied in IPP/1.0...this is not a requirement on implementation,
and should be spelled "must".
CM> Editorial
Finally, if you need to use one of these upper cased keywords
with "not", it should be "MUST NOT" or "SHALL NOT", rather
than "MUST not" or SHALL not (or even "SHALL also not")
to have one word upper cased and the other not, is confusing.
CM> Editorial
2. there appear to be a number of artifacts in the plain text
versions of the documents, which may have resulted from
conversion to text from some other format. For instance, tables
are poorly formatted in the text version, I saw at least one
instance of overprinting, and there appear to be missing pieces
of text here and there.
Since the plain text versions are considered authoritative, they
need to be carefully proofread.
CM> Editorial
draft-ietf-ipp-rat-02.txt:
1. the last paragraph (9) of section 4 may need tweaking depending
on whether IPP is revised to use a different default port than
HTTP<< or if it's revised to use PRINT instead of POST.
CM> Editorial, once the HTTP solution is decided.
2. section 7 is actually missing the copyright notice; it only
contains the license.
CM> Editorial
draft-ietf-ipp-req-01.txt:
1. Even though the IPP WG was told to write a requirements document,
some IESG folks have pushed back on using the word "requirements"
in a document title. My guess is that the title should be changed
to something like "Design Goals for an Internet Printing Protocol".
Either that, or many of the "requirements" need more justification
to convince the reader that they're obviously requirements and
not merely goals.
CM> Editorial
2. Section 1: It's not clear how or why a web browser is part of a
complete Internet Printing system.
CM> Editorial
3. Section 2.1.4: it's not clear why a user needs to have the ability
to submit a print job by reference.
CM> Add text explaining it save the user to first download a large
document that sits on a repository in a server.
4. Section 2.2: change "the user may only see his own jobs" to
"the user might only be able to see his own jobs".
CM> Editorial
5. Section 3, third paragraph, last sentence. Seems like
"must properly handle this methodology" should be "must properly
handle either methodology".
CM> Editorial
6. Section 3.1, first paragraph. "Whenever possible, IPP ought
to make use of ..." should perhaps be "Whenever reasonable,..."
CM> Editorial
7. 3.1, second paragraph. "printing environments describes"...
should be "printing environments described";
"document to be printed may all exist" should be
"document to be printed may each exist" ;
"protection are much stronger" should be
"protection may be much stronger"
CM> Editorial
8. 3.3, first paragraph. "shall be extensible by several
means that facilitates interoperability and prevents"...
should be "facilitate" and "prevent"
CM> Editorial
9. section 3.3: the structure of the bulleted list is confusing;
some of the bullets should apparently be subordinate to the others.
4th bullet: needs a space between "attributes" and "and"
CM> Editorial
10. section 4.2. there are significant security risks associated
with driver installation; I don't see any discussion of those risks.
CM> Consider adding new text - although driver installation is
really outside the scope of IPP v1.0.
11. section 7. there appears to be overprinting in the
acknowledgements section (at least, enscript didn't handle it right)
CM> Editorial
12. the document seems to assume that users will download a driver
to talk to a particular printer; there's no requirement that users
be able to talk to printers -- even in reduced functionality
mode -- without downloading a driver. this would seem to constrain
the cross-platform portability of the standard, as well as introducing
security risks. (which is not to say that IPP itself has problems
with this ... I think it's okay .. but the assumption that everyone
who wants to talk to a printer can download and install a driver
is not a valid one...it's too windows centric)
CM> Editorial
13. section 9.23. do we have permission to use Kinko's and Sir
Speedy's
names/trademarks? If not, should probably substitute generic names.
CM> Editorial
14. document is missing a security considerations section at the end.
it can refer to section 4.1 but should also mention security problems
related to downloading drivers.
CM> Editorial
draft-ietf-ipp-model-09.txt:
1. Section 2.4: should refer to TLS, not SSL3. Also, the
"https" URL prefix is nonstandard.
CM> Editorial, we should take out all references to SSL3
and https.
2. at the end of section 3.1.3, this is misstated:
if the URL type allows a port number and one is specified,
that port number must be used. if no port number is specified,
the default port must be used. (if the URL type doesn't
allow a port number and one is specified anyway, it's arguably
a parse error on the URL and the whole operation should fail)
CM> Editorial.
3. section 3.1.4.1, last paragraph:
"object SHALL NOT change either of these attributes and SHALL
except them as if they were valid." it's not clear (to me)
what this means: doesn't this put the printer in a position
where it cannot report errors in the natural language?
I understand not allowing the printer to change the request,
but shouldn't this be an error condition, and if so, how should
it be reported?
CM> Check if this an inconsistency in the document
4. section 3.2.1.2, under "Group 3: Job Object Attributes"
"Printer object always uses is" should be
"Printer object always uses its"
CM> Editorial
5. section 4.1.1
it's not clear to me why, if anything defined as 'text' is also
allowed to use 'textWithLanguage' syntax, that there are separate
syntaxes for text vs. textWithLanguage. Why not either do:
text = textWithLanguage | textUsingImplicitLanguage
and just call everything 'text' from then on out?
(which would be a purely editorial simplification)
or just elimiate the implicit language form altogether?
(which would be a protocol simplification)
CM> Editorial, as long as we do not make changes
that are visable in the protocol.
6. 4.1.2, 5th paragraph
"SHALL accept, support, and return both the 'text' and
'textWithLanguage'
reads as if objects are requried to *return* both syntaxes
for every text attribute...not one or the other.
CM> Editorial
7. section 4.1.8.
if you must refer to https, please refer to it as non-standard.
CM> Editorial, remove reference to https
8. section 4.1.9
what does it mean to restrict the use of utf-8 to iso 10646?
why do you want to impose such a restriction?
CM> Tom Hastings to check.
9. section 4.1.11
'mimeMediaType' is too short, especially given that it contains
the parameters also. 127 octets would be marginal. 255 would
be a lot better. (is there a reason to use 2**n-1?)
CM> Any objections to increase the length?
10. section 4.2.7
does the page-ranges count page images rather than docuemnt
page numbers (say in eps or pdf?)
CM> Needs clarification.
11. section 4.3.1
despite widespread use of "https" etc, the URI "access method"
shouldn't be used to indicate the presense or lack of "security";
when necessary to specify a particular security technology in
a URI, that should be a done with a paramter (e.g.
";auth-type=digest").
CM> This is either a misunderstanding from Keith, or we have
expressed things poorly. We do not have that dependency.
12. section 4.3.7
for the case where there is an IPP front-end to some other kind
of printer queue, and it's not possible for the front-end
to determine whether the job is 'completed' according to the
IPP definition, what status should it report when the job
is finished as best as can be determined?
it seems like 'completed' is the right thing to do here,
but this would be inconsistent with the definition.
CM> We need to figure out what the right reply is.
13. section 4.4.2
the example makes it appear as if "password-printer" is a magic
string in a URL, which indicates that a printer is to use
basic or digest authenticaiton
CM> Needs some rewording and maybe change example.
14. section 4.4.24
cleartext passwords are no longer allowed in URLs
CM> So what? We do not have a problem with that, or?
15. section 5.1, last paragraph
"Clients may choose to ignore any parameters that it does not
understand"
should be "...that they do not understand".
CM> Editorial
16. section 5.4
Conforming clients MUST (not SHOULD) support TLS access.
CM> Which TLS? See earlier comments. Seems controversial proposal.
17. section 6.1
If I'm not mistaken, it's inappropriate for the IPP RFC to actually
name the experts.
CM> Editorial
Nor do I think it's okay to have PWG "specify a replacement
[expert] at any time", because PWG isn't responsible to IETF in any
way.
Nor do I think it's okay to give PWG control over the keywoard/enum
value space. IANA can delegate to PWG, but IANA should have ultimate
authority.
This section needs to be reviewed by IANA.
CM> Tom Hastings to check with IANA.
draft-ietf-ipp-protocol-05.txt:
1. Section 3.2.
I probably haven't grokked how these are used, but are there enough
attribute tags and value tags to have room for future expansion?
CM> I hope so.
2. Section 3.9
some text appears to be missing
CM> Editorial
3. section 3.11
The table in the text version is illegible.
CM> Editorial
4. section 4
IPP needs its own default port and url scheme. Support for port 80
should be optional.
CM> If we introduce a new default port for IPP, I think that support
for 80 will still be required.
5. section 4.1
table is difficult to read
CM> Editorial
6. section 4.2
it looks like there might be missing information in the
accept-language row of the table.
CM> Editorial
7. section 5
IPP needs its own port; support for port 80 should be optional.
CM> If we introduce a new default port for IPP, I think that support
for 80 will still be required.
draft-ietf-ipp-lpd-ipp-map-03.txt
1. section 4.3
table is difficult to read in the text version
CM> Editorial
2. section 7
change title to "Security Considerations". yes, some folks are picky
about this.
CM> Editorial
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Carl-Uno Manros
Principal Engineer - Advanced Printing Standards - Xerox Corporation
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