Greetings,
Here are some points of feedback from reviewing the Cloud Imaging Requirements and Model specification “wd-cloudimagingmodel10-20150122.pdf”:
Page 14, lines 408-410: Grammatical problems, break into 2 sentences or similar fix - “In the first two cases, standard file access protocols are used in third use case existing standard network Imaging protocols following the MFD Model [PWG5108.01] may be used”
Page 14, lines 419: Extra “and” - “Also, and the Local Imaging Service…”
Page 23, line 715: The Table 1 caption probably should be bumped to the next page
Page 26, lines 792 - 797: Formatting seems a bit odd or at least hard to read. The “k.” list item seems either misplaced or the paragraph above it (“This message includes…”) should be indented more appropriately.
Page 26, line 819: “ResourceKOctetsFree;” should probably have a colon rather than a semi-colon
Page 26, line 823: “and sends a, update” probably should be “and sends an update”
Page 27, line 853: “synchronism”? Would “synchrony” or “synchronicity” be better?
Page 29, line 922: references to RFC 2903 and RFC 2904 not listed in the References section, and are lacking bookmark links
Page 35, line 1034: I don’t quite understand the ordering of the sub-sections of section 4.2.1. Section 4.2.1.1 describes AddDocumentImages, but 4.2.1.2 describes IdentifyDevice. Are these supposed to be in alphabetical order? Or is there some other rationale being used for the order in which the subsections of 4.2.1 appear?
Page 71-72: URLs are “live” in some cases but not others; PWG 5100.17 has a blue URL; PWG URLs are in some cases using “ftp” scheme and in other cases using “http” scheme.
Hope this helps,
Smith
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Smith Kennedy
Hewlett-Packard Co.
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