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<html><head></head><body style="word-wrap: break-word; -webkit-nbsp-mode: space; -webkit-line-break: after-white-space; ">My comments:<div><br></div><div>1. Abstract: maybe spell out facsimile here instead of just using "fax", and I suggest combining paragraph 1 and 2 since there is duplicate information (and "This document also ..." is used a couple times in a row) - I'm a big fan of short abstracts...</div><div><br></div><div>2. Page 4: Should add "About the Workgroup for Imaging Management Solutions" section with the links to the PMP activity in it (just like we do for others...)</div><div><br></div><div>3. Page 7: Most printers sold today are MFDs, so I would recommend just dropped "in office environments".</div><div><br></div><div>4. Global: Do we care that MODEM is an acronym (MOdulator DEModulator) and not an ordinary word?</div><div><br></div><div>5. Page 8, section 2.2:</div><div><span class="Apple-tab-span" style="white-space:pre"> </span>a. Line 214: extra blank line</div><div><span class="Apple-tab-span" style="white-space:pre"> </span>b. Lines 224-225: Wrong paragraph style, so you needed an extra blank line?</div><div><br></div><div>6. Page 9, section 3.1:</div><div><span class="Apple-tab-span" style="white-space:pre"> </span>a. Line 232: Missing space - list style issue? (should be 12pt before, suppress between paragraphs of same style), see page 11, section 3.4 which has a different style...</div><div><br></div><div>7. Page 14, Section 4.2, Line 337: "Fax Modem" has a space, but none of the other subunits do. Typo?</div><div><br></div><div>8. Global: Check that your footer text has a space before the "Page N of M" line; Page 16 has no whitespace between the table and footer...</div><div><br></div><div>9. Page 22, Section 8, Line 452: New paragraph?</div><div><br></div><div>10. Page 26, Section 9.3: Wrong format for registrations; see existing 5100.x specs for the format...</div><div><br></div><div>11. Page 30, Section 11: "Michael Sweet" instead of "Mike Sweet"</div><div><br></div><div>That's all!</div><div><br></div><div><br></div><div><br></div><div><br></div><div><div><div>On Feb 26, 2012, at 9:16 AM, Ira McDonald wrote:</div><br class="Apple-interchange-newline"><blockquote type="cite">Hi folks,<br><br>[For WIMS WG last call]<br>
<br><br>I just posted a Stable draft of the Printer MIB and IPP MFD
<span>Alerts</span> <br>(<span>MFD</span> <span>Alerts</span>) specification at:<br><br><a href="ftp://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/pmp/wd/wd-pmpmfdalerts10-20120226.pdf" target="_blank">ftp://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/pmp/wd/wd-pmpmfdalerts10-20120226.pdf</a> / doc<br>
- clean copy with line numbers and live table of contents<br>
<br><a href="ftp://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/pmp/wd/wd-pmpmfdalerts10-20120226-rev.pdf" target="_blank">ftp://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/pmp/wd/wd-pmpmfdalerts10-20120226-rev.pdf</a> / doc<br>- redlines copy with line numbers and live table of contents<br>
<br>Note 1: This version is technically complete, the IPP binding has been <br>prototyped by Apple, and this document is ready for WG last call.<br><br>Note 2: There is still a trailing blank line at the end of section 6.4, but this is<br>
an artifact of the PDF creation (it doesn't show in the MS Word source).<br><br>Comments?<br>
<br>Cheers,<br>- Ira<br><br>-----------------------------------------------------------------<br><div id=":7i"><br><div><div>Change History for version of 26 February 2012 – Stable<br></div></div></div><br clear="all">Status: Changed status to Stable based on Apple reported prototype <br>
of IPP binding, per WIMS WG review.<br><br>Editorial: Revised section 3.3 Out-of-Scope to change “must not” to <br>“should not”, since section 3 Requirements is Informative.<br><br>Editorial: Revised headers of Table 2 in section 5.2 and Table 3 in <br>
section 5.3 to delete redundant word “Value” and thus correct widowed <br>line at bottom of Table 2 (see clean version), per WIMS WG review.<br><br><div style="display:inline"></div><div style="display:inline"></div><div style="display:inline">
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