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Hi, Monday (13 June 2011)<br><br>High North has reviewed the FaxOut Service and has comments.<br><br>These augment the Apple and Lexmark comments and try to avoid overlap.<br>
<br>Cheers,<br>- Ira<br><br>------------------------------------------------------------------------<br><br> [Comments on "wd-mfdfaxoutmodel10-20110503.pdf"]<br><br>- Global - inconsistent capitalization<br>
- change "multifunction device" to "Multifunction Device" throughout<br><br>Line 179-180 - plurals should be singular<br>- change "abstract models include the functional models and interfaces<br> of a FaxOutServices."<br>
to "abstract model include the functional model and interfaces<br> of a FaxOutService."<br><br>Line 185-186 - wrong pronoun and singular should be plural<br>- change "Jobs with its associated to FaxOutJobTicket"<br>
to "Jobs with their associated to FaxOutJobTickets"<br><br>Line 188 - ambiguous verb<br>- change "execute" to "try to satisfy"<br><br><br>Line 192 - case error<br>- change "FaxOut templates" to "FaxOut Templates"<br>
<br>Line 195 and 196 - noun as verb (2 instances)<br>- change "to FaxOut" to "to send FaxOut Jobs"<br><br>Line 196 - word order<br>- change "batch job FaxOut" to "batch FaxOut Jobs"<br>
<br>- Line 196 - noun as verb<br>- change "automated FaxOut" to "automated sending"<br><br>Line 197 - missing word<br>- change "documents separated" to "documents each separated"<br>
<br>Line 198 - plural should be singular<br>- change "the FaxOutServices" to "a FaxOutService"<br><br>Line 205-208 - duplicate sentence<br>- delete second "There is no FaxOutService specific terminology."<br>
<br>Line 242 - wrong verb implies future standardization<br>- change "will be defined" to "could be defined"<br><br>Line 242 - plural should be singular<br>- change "FaxOutServices" to "FaxOutService"<br>
<br>Line 285-286 - missing reference<br>- should be section 6.1<br><br>Line 304, 414, and 643 - undefined term (3 instances)<br>- need to define "Job metadata"<br><br>Line 335 and 360 - wrong term (2 instances)<br>
- change "FaxOutServer" to "FaxOutService"<br><br>Line 418 - number should be word<br>- change "0" to "zero" at end-of-line<br><br>Line 423 and 530 - ambiguous terms<br>- change "Job Receipt and Document Receipt"<br>
to "FaxOutJobReceipt and FaxOutDocumentReceipt"<br><br>Line 460 - wrong spacing<br>- change "FaxOutDocument Processing" to "FaxOutDocumentProcessing"<br><br>Line 477 - wrong spacing<br>- change "FaxOutJob Description" to "FaxOutJobDescription"<br>
<br>Line 489 - wrong spacing<br>- change "FaxOutJob Processing" to "FaxOutJobProcessing"<br><br>Line 525 - ambiguous term<br>- change "with one Job" to "with one FaxOutJob"<br><br>Line 536 - wrong spacing<br>
- change "FaxOutDocument Receipt" to "FaxOutDocumentReceipt"<br><br>Line 541 - wrong spacing<br>- change "FaxOutDocument Status" to "FaxOutDocumentStatus"<br><br>Line 565 - wrong spacing<br>
- change "FaxOutDocument Description" to "FaxOutDocumentDescription"<br><br>Line 577 - wrong spacing<br>- change "FaxOutDocument Processing" to "FaxOutDocumentProcessing"<br><br>Line 586 - wrong case<br>
- change "Remote FaxOut Client" to "remote FaxOut Client"<br><br>Line 617 - ambiguous verb<br>- change "may contain" to "can contain" (non-conformance term)<br><br>------------------------------------------------------------------------<br>
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