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Comments against March 21 2011 clean pdf.<br><br>Header needs to reflect the title (Copy Service Semantic Model and Service Interface)<br>Line 40: title here doesn't match the front cover<br>Line 171: The MFD Copy Service abstract model not model (includes)<br>
Line 172: underscore between connected and multifunction<br>Line 220: The reference to the MFD Model and Common Semantics spec. is inconsistent.<br>Shouldn't be MFD Overall (search for the word overall)<br>Line 222: update name of MFD document.<br>
Line 222: three e.g., without the commas in this paragraph.<br>Line 250: Add name of MFD Model and Common Semantics spec before reference. (alternatively<br>could just do this at the first mention and just use the bracketed reference afterward)<br>
Line 282: suggest rewording last sentence to The System element provides an all-encompassing view of all <br>the Subunits of the MFD. (or at least add a comma after MFD in the current sentence)<br>Line 334: Fourth row of table last cell has an extra comma at the end of the first line<br>
Line 338: Need a comma after i.e.<br>Line 345: extra period before the parenthetical<br>Line 379: extra space before the period.<br>Line 380: reword last sentence to "The element values can be modified directly or modified <br>
indirectly through an operation.<br>Line 490: MFD Model and Common Semantics spec reference is bad<br>Line 479: MFD Model and Common Semantics spec reference is bad<br>Line 504: See line 490 comment.<br>Line 522: should be optional ...not option<br>
Line 573: NEED NOT is not a conformance term<br>Line 551: change font of paragraph to template font, not Times New Roman<br>Line 576: See line 490 comment.<br>Line 579: See line 490 comment.<br>Line 582: See line 490 comment.<br>
Line 587: need to put the PWG number here and fix the name of the document<br>to: MFD Model and Common Semantics version 1.0<br><br><br clear="all"><b>Jerry Thrasher</b><br>Senior Engineer, WW Corporate Standards<br>Lexmark International Inc.<br>
C14/082-1, 740 New Circle Rd, Lexington Ky 40550<br>Office: +1 859 825 4056 Fax: +1 859 232 7628<br>thrasher(at)lexmark(dot)com<br><br>
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