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<span style="font-size: 12pt;">Many thanks for the time and effort. These are minor editorial comments that I should have made earlier.</span></div>
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<p class="elementToProof" style="margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px;"><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">Para 3.2.7 - 3.2.8 In the references to
Figures 1, 2 , 3 and 4, the spec reads similar to "</span><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: black;">Ed's experience and the underlying IPP interaction is illustrated
in the sequence diagram in Figure 4.</span><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">" One option is to change "is" to "are" for grammer. An alternative
wording might be "The </span><span style="letter-spacing: normal; font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255); font-weight: 400;">IPP
interaction</span><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);"> underlying Ed's experience
</span><span style="letter-spacing: normal; font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255); font-weight: 400;">is illustrated in the sequence
diagram in Figure </span><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">..."</span></p>
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<p class="elementToProof" style="margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px;"><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">Para 4.1 . "By convention, the Get-Printer-Attributes
is expected to never challenge the Client for authentication." I suggest </span>
<span style="letter-spacing: normal; font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255); font-weight: 400;">the Get-Printer-Attributes</span><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);"> <u>operation</u>..."</span></p>
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<p class="elementToProof" style="margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px;"><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0);">Para 6.2.3 I suggest "</span><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%;">This
attribute MAY be used with the "job-password" attribute (section 6.1.1)<u>. However,</u> this could prevent the initial copies or the "job-release-action” attribute (section 6.1.3) to create a Release Job that is also a Proof Job." Or separate with a semicolin.
I also find it confusing... how could initial copies prevent creation of a </span>
<span style="letter-spacing: normal; font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255); line-height: 115%; font-weight: 400;">Release Job that
is also a Proof Job.</span><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%;">?</span></p>
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<p class="elementToProof" style="margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px;"><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%;">Para 6.4.18 - Unexpected
font change.</span></p>
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<p class="elementToProof" style="margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px;"><span style="font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); line-height: 115%;">Table 18. In two places
"Used in cases of fan-out [STD92], might not cause a Job to be aborted vs. conflicts detected at submission time that prevent Job Creation." Might be confusing. Perhaps "Although
</span><span style="letter-spacing: normal; font-family: Aptos, Aptos_EmbeddedFont, Aptos_MSFontService, Calibri, Helvetica, sans-serif; font-size: 12pt; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); background-color: rgb(255, 255, 255); line-height: 115%; font-weight: 400;"> certain
conflicts detected at submission time prevent Job Creation, those reported in cases of fan-out [STD92] might not cause a Job to be aborted."</span></p>
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<span style="font-size: 12pt;">Thanks,</span></div>
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<span style="font-size: 12pt;"> Bill Wagner</span></div>
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