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<div dir="ltr"><div><div><div>Hi,<br><br></div>FWIW - I second Mike's comments about internal links. For the IPP<br></div>System Service, this would affect several hundred references.<br><br></div><div>Cheers,<br></div><div>- Ira<br><br></div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br clear="all"><div><div class="gmail_signature" data-smartmail="gmail_signature"><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr">Ira McDonald (Musician / Software Architect)<br>Co-Chair - TCG Trusted Mobility Solutions WG<br>Chair - Linux Foundation Open Printing WG<br>Secretary - IEEE-ISTO Printer Working Group<br>Co-Chair - IEEE-ISTO PWG Internet Printing Protocol WG<br>IETF Designated Expert - IPP & Printer MIB<br>Blue Roof Music / High North Inc<br><a style="color:rgb(51,51,255)" href="http://sites.google.com/site/blueroofmusic" target="_blank">http://sites.google.com/site/blueroofmusic</a><br><a style="color:rgb(102,0,204)" href="http://sites.google.com/site/highnorthinc" target="_blank">http://sites.google.com/site/highnorthinc</a><br>mailto: <a href="mailto:blueroofmusic@gmail.com" target="_blank">blueroofmusic@gmail.com</a><br>Jan-April: 579 Park Place Saline, MI 48176 734-944-0094<br>May-Dec: PO Box 221 Grand Marais, MI 49839 906-494-2434<br><br><div style="display:inline"></div><div style="display:inline"></div><div style="display:inline"></div><div></div><div></div><div></div><div></div></div></div></div></div></div>
<br><div class="gmail_quote">On Thu, Dec 8, 2016 at 11:29 AM, Michael Sweet <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:msweet@apple.com" target="_blank">msweet@apple.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex"><div style="word-wrap:break-word">Smith,<div><br></div><div>Thanks for your feedback. Looking through the comments, I'm not sure how to (simply, easily) resolve #5 - Word's support for internal hyperlinks is poor, and trying to get it to select only the bracketed name ("[FOO]") in the 79 places I'd need to do this isn't something I want to do unless people see this as necessary. For the record, in the history of the PWG I think your implementor's guide is the only specification we have ever produced that had such internal links...</div><div><br></div><div><div><div class="h5"><br><div><blockquote type="cite"><div>On Dec 7, 2016, at 5:02 PM, Kennedy, Smith (Wireless Architect) <<a href="mailto:smith.kennedy@hp.com" target="_blank">smith.kennedy@hp.com</a>> wrote:</div><br class="m_1255811489829181381Apple-interchange-newline"><div><div style="word-wrap:break-word">Greetings,<div><br></div><div>Here are a number of points of feedback on the IPP 3D Printing extensions draft in PWG Last Call (<a href="http://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/ipp/wd/wd-ipp3d10-20161114.pdf" target="_blank">http://ftp.pwg.org/pub/pwg/<wbr>ipp/wd/wd-ipp3d10-20161114.pdf</a><wbr>) - apologies that I haven't submitted these earlier:</div><div><br></div><div><ol><li>Page 10, line 267: "extrude ABS and/or PLA filaments" might be better phrased as "extrude filaments of ABS, PLA, or other substances"</li><li>Page 10, line 271: "Discovery of 3D Printers is based on..." perhaps should be "Discovery of IPP 3D Printers is based on..."</li><li>Page 12, section 2.5: the URL highlighting seems to be inconsistent - only one is in blue with an underline</li><li>Page 12, section 2.5: 3MF isn't listed here as an organization, but ought to be?</li><li>Page 13, line 347 / 350 / 352 / etc.: The reference doesn't seem to be a bookmark that can take the reader to the reference listing</li><li>Page 13, line 357: PDF isn't listed as an existing specification</li><li>Page 13, line 358: "...document should define IPP attributes..." changed to be "...document defines IPP attributes..."</li><li>Page 22, line 559: "DNS-SD based Discovery" might instead be "DNS-SD for service advertisement and discovery". Also, not quite sure why "Discovery" is capitalized here...</li><li>Page 22, line 573: Some weird pagination stuff going on - lines 574-576 should be on page 22, and Table 2 should be on possibly page 22 or maybe page 23. But all the whitespace on page 23 seems to be a formatting glitch.</li><li>Page 24, line 586: "ASSIGN OID HERE"? Is it time to assign the OID?</li><li>Page 25, line 603: Should "[RFC3510] and IPP-USB [IPP-USB]" be "[RFC3510] and/or IPP-USB [IPP-USB]"?</li><li>Page 34, line 729: If "materials-key" is required, then "printer-strings-uri" should also be required, but it isn't listed in table 5 / section 6.5</li><li>Page 35, line 759: If "materials-key" is required, then "printer-strings-uri" should also be required, but it isn't listed in table 5 / section 6.5</li><li>Page 44, line 979: Is there any requirement as to the document format of the images available at this URI?</li><li>Page 54, section 13.4: Shouldn't the 3MF Consortium be handing the registration of the "media/3mf" media type?</li><li>Page 54, line 1338: The type name "media/3mf" isn't consistent with the type name listed in table 2 ("model/3mf"). Which is correct?</li></ol><div>Thanks for the hard work, Mike and all contributors!</div></div><div><br><div>
Smith<br><br>/**<br> Smith Kennedy<br> Wireless Architect - Client Software - IPG-PPS<br> Standards - IEEE ISTO PWG / Bluetooth SIG / Wi-Fi Alliance / NFC Forum / USB IF<br> Chair, IEEE ISTO Printer Working Group<br> HP Inc.<br>*/<br><br><br>
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