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--></style></head><body lang="EN-US" link="blue" vlink="purple"><div class="WordSection1"><p class="MsoNormal">Review based on April 20,2012 ; clean PDF file.</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">Page 10, line 309; Reword "large attributes" to attributes with large volumes of data...</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">Page 14, line 435 and 440; the e.g. needs a comma after in both places</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 21, line 659; the i.e. needs a comma after</p><p class="MsoNormal">
</p><p class="MsoNormal">page 31, line 898 and 915; the fully qualified name of RFC4122 doesn't need to be stated every time it's referenced, just the first time</p><p class="MsoNormal">unfortunately the first time it's referenced is on page 26, line 788; where it's NOT fully qualified. (also line 962)</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 33, line 963; given that any printer that supports this must support a MAX number of octets of at least 255, shouldn't the range allowance</p><p class="MsoNormal">for this attribute be (integer(255;1024))? Probably should include a discussion of the number vs the password lengths possible and possibly even</p>
<p class="MsoNormal">a discussion of appropriate length for the client to require.</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 33, line 965; cross reference should be to 5.1.2 not 5.1.1.</p><p class="MsoNormal">
</p><p class="MsoNormal">page 35, line 984; this attribute is listed a recommended but then list a case where it's required.....doesn't this end up as some sort if</p><p class="MsoNormal">conditionally required state? This occurs frequently throughout the document.</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 39, line 1113; this paragraph needs to be prefaced with "If this attribute is supported then this action must happen on power-up".</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
<p class="MsoNormal">page 46 line 1333; The ABNF cross reference in the back is for [STD68] but here it's listed by its RFC #.. I actually prefer the RFC # </p><p class="MsoNormal">instead of [STD68].</p><p class="MsoNormal">
</p><p class="MsoNormal">page 46, line 1333; The figure reference is incorrect, should be Figure 3, not Y.</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 49, line 1453; Here ABNF is referenced by [STD68], matches the reference in the back but I prefere the RFC #. </p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 52, line 1536; The e.g. needs a comma.</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 54, line 1599; The reference to section 5.1.5 should be to 5.1.6.</p><p class="MsoNormal">
</p><p class="MsoNormal">page 55; incorrect references to section 5.1.X in line 1605,1621,1625,1630,1634; and 1646 on next page.</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 57, line 1697; The e.g. needs a comma.</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 59, table 11; Bad references to section 5.1.X in two places.</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 67, line 1869; See ABNF-related comments previously.</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 68, line 1915; the example for the number of impressions/pages etc might be more readable if there was a table or figure along with it,</p><p class="MsoNormal">as it's a pretty complex situation.</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 71; Bad references to section 5.1.X in line 1961,1969,1976,....but correct in 1989, also incorrect on page 72, line 1997,2008,2009,2010</p><p class="MsoNormal">2019 and line 2039 on page 73.</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal">page 72, line 2016; Section 7.2 of what...doesn't seem to point to this document.</p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p><p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif"">Jerry Thrasher<br>
</span></b><span style="font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif"">Senior Engineer, WW Corporate Standards<br>Lexmark International Inc.<br>H0D1314/035-3, 740 West New Circle Rd, Lexington Ky 40550<br>
Office: +1 859 825 4056 Fax: +1 859 232 6613<br>thrasher(at)lexmark(dot)com</span></p><p class="MsoNormal"> </p></div><br />--
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