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Some comments:<br>
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<li>Line 18: There is a plethora of document editors, not all of
whom are listed here.</li>
<li>Line 26: Should we have a link to the IDS section of the PWG
wiki?<br>
</li>
<li>Lines 35-36: IEEE 2600-2008 and its brethren <i>do </i>address
HCD services that that don't immediately involve a local user
(for examples: storage/retrieval on an MFP's document server, or
sending a fax from a PC client through an MFP). I'm not sure
what to suggest as replacement text.</li>
<li>Footnote 1: Is it more modern to use the term "Image Character
Recognition" rather than "Optical..." (since optics may not be
involved)? Or is it better to just use the term that is more
widely used (and understood?). I don't know...</li>
<li>Lines 39 and 40: No need to put quote marks around Cloud
(unless you're being sarcastic ;-) ).</li>
<li>Lines 40-42: That last sentence should be more specific, such
as by appending "...in a Cloud Computing environment".</li>
<li>Line 48: To account for the trend toward continuous monitoring
and not just log aggregation, could we reword as follows:
"deployed in enterprise <b>and government </b>environments <b>to
provide continuous monitoring and analysis of</b>
security-related ...".<br>
</li>
<li>Lines 56-57: Slightly better wording, I think: "Hardcopy
devices... <b>have not been widely integrated into these new
assessment protocol schemes, in part because</b> there is no
standardized set...".</li>
<li>Is it premature to mention IEEE 2600.1 supporting documents,
even vaguely, in the IDS charter?<br>
</li>
</ol>
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Regards,
Brian Smithson
PMP, CSM, CISSP, CISA, ISO 27000 PA
Security Research, Planning
Advanced Customer Technologies
Ricoh Americas Corporation
<a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:bsmithson@ricohsv.com">bsmithson@ricohsv.com</a>
(408)346-4435</pre>
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